Is it bad to have sentences that are too long? [closed]
Closed by System on Nov 13, 2013 at 06:00
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The sentence in question is:
As players move around the board, they buy, rent and sell properties from and to each other with each player trying to maximize his or her own wealth in a zero-sum game where everyone must lose in order for one player to win
...and I'm wondering if that is clear enough or too wordy.
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Too long.
Let's add some commas and trim the redundancies:
As players move around the board, they buy, rent, and sell properties from and to each other, with each player trying to maximize his or her own wealth.
Not only does "zero-sum" actually mean "everyone must lose in order for one player to win," pretty much all board games intended for players out of preschool are zero-sum. It's kind of a given that you have one winner and everyone else loses.
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