Posts by Ilmari Karonen
My suggestion would be almost the polar opposite of Stephan's; I think you ought to try switching back to Nicene/Cherry's viewpoint, at least temporarily, very soon after she's found by Shadow. Wh...
Yeah, mileages do vary, and your friend might just be an oddball reader. Don't worry about it too much. Just write your story the way you want to write it, and see if it works. That said, it's q...
Honestly, I can't tell if the narrator is supposed to be male or female, but I do kind of get the feeling that the author is probably male — especially if the narrator is supposed to be female. (A...
Of course you can't just ignore all basic grammar rules. For example, writing: Not cover the opening machines power be while do. obviously makes no sense to anyone, even though it's got all ...
Honestly, I see nothing wrong with your example. It reads quite naturally to me, and feels much less intrusive than some of the alternatives suggested in other answers here. It's possible, I supp...
You do (often) have a fourth option: rephrase the problematic sentence to avoid gender-marked words. For example, instead of translating "How are you?" literally into a language like Hebrew that h...
