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This is my first time writing a third-person omniscient narrator. And just got stucked in a dilemma. This is the opening of the story: Once again Kuo found himself standing face to face with Me...
#3: Attribution notice added
by
System
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2019-12-08T03:31:04Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
by
Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T03:31:04Z (almost 5 years ago)
This is my first time writing a third-person omniscient narrator. And just got stucked in a dilemma. This is the opening of the story: > Once again Kuo found himself standing face to face with Mei-Ling at the airport. He looked to his side. Sunlight poured in through the window of the observation area. An gloomy orange. Beyond the glass, a Boeing 747 parked in profile, its wings curving slightly upwards, its metallic surface mirroring the evening sky. A giant silver bird designed to help people fly to their dreams, to their journeys, to their new destinations. Kuo turned back to Mei-Ling who was carrying medium-sized Boston bag and an Asus Laptop case. **Unlike most girls, she liked to travel light; she hated carrying too many heavy things on her shoulders. It was something she wanted to avoid at all cost. Even for long trip like this one.** The bolded part is told in the POV of the protagonist's girlfriend. Should I put it in a different paragraph since it's a different POV? Or it's just OK where it is?
#1: Imported from external source
by
System
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2014-05-14T14:33:58Z (over 10 years ago)
Original score: 3