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1) Lengthen it. You're not going to have rat-a-tat-tat patter graveside. 2) Take each phrase you feel is clichéd, determine the meaning, and rewrite it in different words. "All we want is for our ...
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2019-12-13T12:00:24Z (over 4 years ago)
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2019-12-08T03:43:51Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
1) Lengthen it. You're not going to have rat-a-tat-tat patter graveside. 2) Take each phrase you feel is clichéd, determine the meaning, and rewrite it in different words. "All we want is for our children to grow healthy and happy" becomes "That's my biggest responsibility and my biggest hope — that my children are healthy and happy, and we didn't break them too much on the way to adulthood." 3) Try the exercise I recommended in my answer to [this question,](https://writers.stackexchange.com/questions/3938/dialogue-writing-practices) where you and a friend ad-lib the scene and record it. Play it back and see how real, unscripted dialogue sounds.
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2014-09-05T10:05:38Z (over 9 years ago)
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