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Here's an example: Not finding anything useful, I went to check the maple. Four times my size, it was the biggest tree in the yard. I mean, it was. A typhoon tore it down three years ago, a...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T03:57:13Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T03:57:13Z (almost 5 years ago)
Here's an example: > Not finding anything useful, I went to check the maple. Four times my size, it was the biggest tree in the yard. I mean, it _was_. A typhoon **tore it down** three years ago, and it had **stayed like that** ever since. > > Not finding anything useful, I went to check the maple. Four times my size, it was the biggest tree in the yard. I mean, it _was_. Three years ago a typhoon **tore it down** , and it had **stayed like that** ever since. As you can see, the related elements are closer to each other in the second example. Does this make it read better than the first one? Is it good practice to always keep related elements as close as possible to each other?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2015-01-06T01:29:13Z (almost 10 years ago)
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