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The middle one is fine, and the third one is okay. The first feels a little dodgy because you're veering close to a dangling participle, where you have a phrase which doesn't have a clear subject. ...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-13T12:00:27Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T03:58:04Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
The middle one is fine, and the third one is okay. The first feels a little dodgy because you're veering close to a _dangling participle,_ where you have a phrase which doesn't have a clear subject. In the first and third sentences, the context clarifies the subject, but I'd rewrite them so you don't get into the habit of sloppy antecedents: > My head still on the pillow, I glanced at the clock. > > And with that he put on the climbing shoes, the harness, and attached himself to the rope. With everything now set, he threw the end of the rope down the cliff, and began his descent.
#1: Imported from external source
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2015-01-14T11:08:00Z (almost 10 years ago)
Original score: 2