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Your first comma isn't the problem. It's that you have an interrupter and didn't put the second comma in. Then, when the smoke had cleared, Jane rushed over to her. An interrupter is a few wo...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-13T12:00:27Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T04:01:37Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
Your first comma isn't the problem. It's that you have an interrupter and didn't put the _second_ comma in. > Then, when the smoke had cleared, Jane rushed over to her. An _interrupter_ is a few words or a whole clause which interrupts the flow of the original framing sentence, and can be safely removed from the original sentence without making it grammatically uncorrect. An interrupter _must_ have bracketing punctuation. You can use commas, M-dashes, or parentheses, or in rare instances ellipses if you're careful. If you take out the interrupter clause here, it just reads: > Then Jane rushed over to her. Other examples: > Jane flung open the door, and — once the smoke had cleared and she wasn't in danger of choking — rushed over to her. > > Jane felt (now that it had been a few years) like she could go back to the city.
#1: Imported from external source
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2015-02-05T11:37:11Z (almost 10 years ago)
Original score: 10