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I suggest you revise your current question to reflect a more general nature. Ask how quotes like this can be revised to achieve the effect you desire. "You're John Doe. Still." The clerk raise...
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2019-12-12T17:48:57Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T04:07:23Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
I suggest you revise your current question to reflect a more general nature. Ask how quotes like this can be revised to achieve the effect you desire. > "You're John Doe. Still." The clerk raised an eyebrow. The trick is to just end the sentence. Find some action (sigh, motion, whatever) for the clerk to do in the next sentence.
#1: Imported from external source
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2015-03-21T20:34:55Z (over 9 years ago)
Original score: 2