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Example from my own writing: "Please take care of yourself," she replied. "Health is the most important thing in life, remember that." "I know, Mom." I had already lost count of the numb...
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Example from my own writing: > "Please take care of yourself," she replied. "Health is the most important thing in life, remember that." > > "I know, Mom." I had already lost count of the number of times she had repeated that. "But I don't know, let's say you do your best to stay healthy: jog every day, eat veggies, drink lots of water, avoid cigarettes and alcohol. Then one day you die in a car accident. Wouldn't it be a big waste? Like building a sand castle just to watch the waves come along and wash it away?" > > "What's your point?" > > "That maybe there's something more to life than health. Something that has nothing to do with the body." > > She said, "Darling, you sure you're all right?" > > Talking to my mom suddenly made me sad. She had good intentions, I knew that. However, sometimes **it felt as if we spoke different languages.** So, that's a cliched metaphor. And here's the problem: it's the perfect one for the passage. Still, it bother's me that I'm using a cliche. So I tried the following: 1) Using a synonym: > However, sometimes it felt as if we spoke different dialects. 2) Using another metaphor: > However, sometimes it felt as if we were standing in opposite shores, shouting to each other. But I don't know. I'm not sure if I'm doing the right thing. What should I do with cliched metaphors? Maybe just remove them?