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I never noticed this in my writing until one of my readers pointed it out: We were driving down the highway in Tom's Toyota 4Runner, dim streetlights passing by, the night city scene fading b...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T04:29:54Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T04:29:54Z (almost 5 years ago)
I never noticed this in my writing until one of my readers pointed it out: > We were driving down the highway in Tom's Toyota 4Runner, dim streetlights passing by, the night city scene fading behind us. > > _Awkward way to begin the chapter from a grammatical perspective. Is there a reason you chose to start in past progressive? I'm left unsure of where I am entirely._ I wrote in the past progressive because I wanted to show that they were _already_ in the highway. If I'd written "We drove down the highway...", it would have looked as if they were _just arriving_ to the highway. Or maybe it's not the case? And I should stay away from the past progressive in situations like this as a rule?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2015-07-26T12:38:21Z (over 9 years ago)
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