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Q&A Gerund Overkill

I like to use gerunds in my writing and I wonder if I'm overdoing it. I wrote this paragraph: I couldn’t help thinking to myself, who is this woman on the phone? And if it’s not Burns’ mother t...

2 answers  ·  posted 9y ago by trin carl‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T04:59:38Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/20694
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar trin carl‭ · 2019-12-08T04:59:38Z (almost 5 years ago)
I like to use gerunds in my writing and I wonder if I'm overdoing it. I wrote this paragraph:

> I couldn’t help **thinking** to myself, who is this woman on the phone? And if it’s not Burns’ mother then why does she want to speak with Burns? Monica’s purse was rattling again and I walked back out to the living room to find her **sitting** down. She took out what I believed was a handheld tape recorder. “Oops,” she said, **placing** the item back in her purse.

I started using gerunds a lot because readers were commenting that I needed more dialogue tags besides s/he said. Dialogue tags coupled with gerunds seemed to help.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2016-01-28T20:57:37Z (almost 9 years ago)
Original score: 1