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Q&A What to avoid when foreshadowing a death?

You don't make him mention death eg "someday, you'll be the death of me..." Eg Star Wars You don't make him show pictures of home to his buddies. This is a DEAD giveaway (excuse my pun), especial...

posted 8y ago by Deau X. Machinus‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Deau X. Machinus‭ · 2019-12-08T05:04:04Z (almost 5 years ago)
You don't make him mention death eg "someday, you'll be the death of me..." Eg Star Wars

You don't make him show pictures of home to his buddies. This is a DEAD giveaway (excuse my pun), especially in military fic.

You might want to weave in a death theme (Eg gladiator) which doesn't really foreshadow anything until it's too late-- the end of the story. Or in your case-- the middle.

You also might want to check out Writing Excuses episode 9.49: Hiding the Open Grave. It is basically what I said, only with more elaboration. You might find it useful to refer to while writing your book.

Tell us how it goes!

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2016-02-21T15:05:48Z (over 8 years ago)
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