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Do a search for "which was." (or whatever your problem structure is) Set up a checklist of five different ways to rewrite it: 1) We did such-and-such. I enjoyed it. 2) When we did such-and-such, ...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-13T12:00:34Z (about 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T05:08:26Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
Do a search for "which was." (or whatever your problem structure is) Set up a checklist of five different ways to rewrite it: 1) We did such-and-such. I enjoyed it. 2) When we did such-and-such, everyone had a great time. 3) Plus we really had fun that time we did such-and-such. 4) Have you ever done such-and-such? What a blast. 5) Such-and-such is so much fun; I have to tell you about the most recent time. et cetera. Then go through and rewrite. You can leave some of the originals, but vary them until your ear stops tripping over it.
#1: Imported from external source
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2016-03-18T17:33:39Z (almost 9 years ago)
Original score: 10