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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/1330
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A personal frustration of mine is when I see a cluster of nouns sitting together in a sentence. I usually see these in highly technical emails, but not exclusively.

Here is a particularly bad example I received this morning:

> The Web Product Provider search print Individual Provider Map does not print the listing originally found [...]

What are some good strategies for breaking up these nouns while still keeping the language specific and concise?

**Edit:** I should add a little context here as well. This statement isn't supposed to cover a complex topic. It's nothing more complicated than the following:

1. User enters a search term
2. User clicks map button on the list of results
3. User prints the list of results

The issue I am trying to tackle is that the user who experienced this problem needs to report enough specifics to be complete, but at the same time, do so in a manner that is easily parsed. There is a trend of using clusters of nouns instead of simple English.

(P.S. I'm asking this so that I can become a better writer, not as ammunition — just in case you were thinking it.)

**Edit #2** : I thought of a few more examples that might paint a better picture of the problem.

> 1. The operations review evaluation task force is responsible for this task.
> 
> 2. He doesn't know how to read the aperture adjustment calibration manual.
> 
> 3. She started the 12-week half-marathon training regimen for beginners.

Original score: 3