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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/23844
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I have recently noticed that I consistently follow an -ed clause with further action or elaboration using -ing. I feel like something is wrong here, even though it sounds and reads well enough to me. I'm relatively self-taught where writing is concerned and so I struggle a bit with the jargon, so bear with me if I have to ask for clarification.

Here's a snip; any feedback you have would be great:

_The insinuation had the desired effect. Erim's fingers relaxed, **showing a golden glint of sweat that had collected in his palms.** The deep valleys and crevices of his worn fury relaxed into dry rivers along the landscape of his weathered face, **his grim mask slowly melting into a look of consideration.** _

I see just glancing at it that I could just as easily change it to "and" without changing the meaning, but it doesn't feel any more or less acceptable.

Is this just a question of style?

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