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Q&A Partial clauses after semi-colons

This is much easier to accept if it's a first-person narrative, because the book is written in your character's voice. Speech/monologue/dialogue is much more forgiving than prose narration. Since t...

posted 8y ago by Lauren Ipsum‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-13T12:00:38Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T05:31:21Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T05:31:21Z (almost 5 years ago)
This is much easier to accept if it's a first-person narrative, because the book is written in your character's voice. Speech/monologue/dialogue is much more forgiving than prose narration. Since these snippets are clearly your narrator "speaking" to the reader, you have a lot of poetic license to be flexible with grammar. It sounds fine.

If anything, I'd use commas rather than semi-colons in _those_ particular snippets because the individual clauses don't have commas themselves. You can get away with a string of fragments separated by commas here. If any clause had commas in it, then the semi-colons would be useful in separating them.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2016-08-23T10:58:30Z (over 8 years ago)
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