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This isn't a comic strip, it's prose. Written this way, the slap seems cartoony. I'd much rather you describe the action than simply recite the sound it makes.
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T05:48:55Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/25606 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
This isn't a comic strip, it's prose. Written this way, the slap seems cartoony. I'd much rather you describe the action than simply recite the sound it makes.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2016-12-21T07:30:53Z (almost 8 years ago)
Original score: 3