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Here are the examples. The first version is the simile and the second the metaphor (I'm not sure, though, what kind it is). We faced away from each other awkwardly, as if we were on the first ...
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System
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2019-12-08T05:52:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
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alex
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2019-12-08T05:52:49Z (almost 5 years ago)
Here are the examples. The first version is the simile and the second the metaphor (I'm not sure, though, what kind it is). > We faced away from each other awkwardly, as if we were on the first date we never had. > > We faced away from each other awkwardly, portraying the first date we never had. > > My past rejection, his present sweetheart, my future surgery, all that swelled up inside me until I burst like a water balloon. > > My past rejection, his present sweetheart, my future surgery, all that swelled up inside me until I burst into tears. > > He held my hand and examined it, as though wanting to read our future in it. > > He held my palm and examined it, perhaps wanting to read our future in it. (All right, this one isn't a metaphor. Not sure what it is.) Are the metaphoric version of the sentences superior to their similian (just made up this word) counterparts? Why or why not?
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System
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2017-01-04T12:20:20Z (almost 8 years ago)
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