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I tend to use alliteration a lot. This is an example from a story I'm writing: "Let me get this straight," Aru said, sliding on her dress. She always felt frosty after failed fornication. "Yo...
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System
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2019-12-08T05:57:26Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Alexandro Chen
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2019-12-08T05:57:26Z (almost 5 years ago)
I tend to use alliteration a lot. This is an example from a story I'm writing: > "Let me get this straight," Aru said, sliding on her dress. She always felt frosty after failed fornication. "You're giving me two thousand yen because you couldn't get it up?" > > "It wasn't _suddenly_." Aru sipped her Americano. Its bitterness formed a frown on her forehead. "Have you seen the movie Pretty Woman?" > > Aru dashed out of Yuuto's apartment and returned to hers in Ginza. There, sipping a can of beer on her couch, she chewed over her new career path. Will this be distracting for the reader? Maybe readers don't care so much about alliteration? Maybe I should focus on finding the right verbs, similes, and metaphors?
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System
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2017-01-17T17:16:21Z (almost 8 years ago)
Original score: 4