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There is nothing wrong with a long sentence, but it should still be a sentence. Long sentences generally result from qualification and elaboration of a single point. But that is not what is happeni...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2020-01-03T20:41:53Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T06:10:59Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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2019-12-08T06:10:59Z (almost 5 years ago)
There is nothing wrong with a long sentence, but it should still be a sentence. Long sentences generally result from qualification and elaboration of a single point. But that is not what is happening in this sentence. Rather it is telling a sequence of events as the midwife reassembles the child. This is a paragraph knit together into a sentence with semicolons. But there is no good reason to run all these events together into a single sentence. Essentially, you should have periods where you have semicolons.
#1: Imported from external source
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2017-03-01T00:51:15Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 0