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Q&A How to describe a kiss between the protagonists in third person?

Apparently, your third person point of view is not omniscient, or you would not face this problem, and if you tried to describe your character's feeling simultaneously, having the previous narratio...

posted 7y ago by Lew‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T06:11:43Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Lew‭ · 2019-12-08T06:11:43Z (almost 5 years ago)
Apparently, your third person point of view is not omniscient, or you would not face this problem, and if you tried to describe your character's feeling simultaneously, having the previous narration written in third limited/objective, you would have to either switch to omniscient, or _head-hop_, which would certainly sound unnatural.

The first thing that comes to my mind is to write two adjacent scenes, where one ends with one character initiating the kiss (describing all the feelings) and the next starts with the second participant responding to it (all the emotions from a new point of view). I am sure there are other ways to handle this situation, but this is what I would do.

It might come through as a repetition but only if their feelings are identical, which is likely not the case, else you would not want to show the kiss from two different points of view.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2017-03-03T14:30:31Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 3