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I'm writing the first draft of a story, I've found that increasingly, I'm writing sentences in a format (I don't know the technical name of this) similar to below - Coming to a stop at the foot...
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2019-12-08T06:14:15Z (almost 5 years ago)
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2019-12-08T06:14:15Z (almost 5 years ago)
I'm writing the first draft of a story, I've found that increasingly, I'm writing sentences in a format (I don't know the technical name of this) similar to below - > Coming to a stop at the foot of the dias, he knelt. > > Raising his right fist to his heart, he said. > > Leading the crowd, he strode through. While doing a cursory reading, the sentences felt strange and jarring to me but I'm not sure. Are sentences of these type OK or should I refrain from using sentences of that type ? Also, how to make them more...crisp, perhaps ?
#1: Imported from external source
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2017-03-16T19:05:02Z (over 7 years ago)
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