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I am writing a logline sentence of a query letter for my novel and used the idiom 'cat and mouse' as follows: A military bioweapons collector is forced to engage in a game of ‘cat and mouse’ w...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T06:17:16Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Richard Stanzak
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2019-12-08T06:17:16Z (almost 5 years ago)
I am writing a logline sentence of a query letter for my novel and used the idiom 'cat and mouse' as follows: > A military bioweapons collector is forced to engage in a game of ‘cat and mouse’ with his Russian counterpart as he seeks a cure for the epidemic he inadvertently created. I was told it is a cliché and you shouldn't use idioms in query letters because they show lack of originality. The problem is, I cannot find a suitable synonym for 'cat and mouse game'. Are ALL idioms really that bad? This one is very descriptive of a conflict that is an impasse despite all attempts at a resolution and the mouse occasionally wins. Is it preferable to spell out concepts like this even though a well-worn idiom like 'cat and mouse game' exists to communicate the concept quickly?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-03-23T23:16:24Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 7