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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/27420
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/

Here's an example from my own writing:

> Watching the ceiling fan stir my thoughts, I said, “His favorite thing was to tell me about his day.”
> 
> Mrs. Saeki gawked at me behind her square glasses. “Unusual from a husband.”
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> I nodded. “And they were all about little things. You know, how he picked his polka tie instead of the stripped one. What mobile games he played on his way to work. Why he called me at four and not at five.”
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> “You didn’t feel bored?”
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> I shook my head. **“When you love someone, nothing that person does is boring.”**

I could have written the **bolded** part as: **"Because I loved him, nothing he did was boring to me."**

What's usually better\* in fiction? The original version of the passage or the second one? (a personal statement or an universal one?)

`\* By better I mean which one touches the reader more deeply? Which one is considered better writing?

Original score: 4