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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/27701
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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/27701
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I haven't read your samples because we don't do critiques. But there is a general question here that may be of use to other people.

If you have too many flashbacks, it it probably a structural problem. Some of the possible causes are:

1. You have started the story in the wrong place. An anxiety to get to the action, or to get to the scenes you are most excited to write, can lead you to skip the necessary build of your story arc. The cure here is to find the proper beginning. 

2. You have chosen the wrong narrative technique for the story you need to tell. Popular as they may be, first person narration and close third person narration are not the right choices for some stories because there is much that the reader needs to know that is not in the character's line of sight. A more classical narrative style may fix this problem. 

3. You may be trying to include information that the reader does not actually care about. It is hard to leave your research and worldbuilding on the cutting room floor, but if it is not essential to the development of the story arc, it just has to go. 

4. The narrative arc may not be well established. Without a strong narrative arc, there is no force pushing the story forward. A writer in search of their arc may find themselves doubling back in search of the end of the string. The answer in this case is simply to step back and find the arc. 

This is by no means an exhaustive list. There could be many other reasons why you have ended up with too many flashbacks. But these are at least some things to look for.

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