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I certainly agree with Mark. Not much to add. But always remember POV. Who's telling the story? Without a doubt Emma Richards was the most beautiful girl in the world. A valid opinion if your...
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System
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2019-12-08T06:28:17Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Surtsey
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2019-12-08T06:28:17Z (over 4 years ago)
I certainly agree with Mark. Not much to add. But always remember POV. Who's telling the story? > Without a doubt Emma Richards was the most beautiful girl in the world. A valid opinion if your narrator is a love-struck high-school boy. And, for me, "relative" description are far better than specific facts. > Mr. Roberts was 6'2" but his wife was only 5'4 That is a rather bland statement of fact. > "You don't want to be late on your first day," said Mrs Roberts, wrapping the scarf around her husband's neck and standing on tip-toes to kiss his cheek. This conveys the required information without pausing the story.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-05-17T05:21:57Z (almost 7 years ago)
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