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for the sake of extra detail There's your problem. Don't add extra detail which your POV character can't perceive. Find someplace else to put the pretty phrase or leave it in your slush file.
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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System
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2019-12-13T12:00:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T06:38:12Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/28709 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
> for the sake of extra detail There's your problem. Don't add extra detail which your POV character can't perceive. Find someplace else to put the pretty phrase or leave it in your slush file.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-06-14T11:03:28Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 7