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In other words, is it strange/confusing to do this? For the next few seconds, I watched Aiko read the letter with her lips agape---lips that steadily curled up into a smile. A contagious one....
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T06:38:35Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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alex
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2019-12-08T06:38:35Z (almost 5 years ago)
In other words, is it strange/confusing to do this? > For the next few seconds, I watched Aiko read the letter with her lips agape---lips that steadily curled up into a smile. A contagious one. Because before realizing it, I found myself smiling too, enjoying a happiness that came from someone else's heart. It was my first time. > > A first time that wouldn't last. > > **"Hey, Daichi." Kiyoshi tapped me on my shoulder.** As opposed of writing: **"Hey, Daichi," Kiyoshi said, tapping me on my shoulder.** Why or why not?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-06-15T14:29:45Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 7