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One of the answers to this question movitated me to ask this. I don't agree 100% with the answerer, however, I think he has good points. Do you really weaken the focus if you mix dialogue and acti...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T06:47:12Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/29288 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
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alex
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2019-12-08T06:47:12Z (almost 5 years ago)
One of the answers to this [question](https://writers.stackexchange.com/questions/29285/ways-to-reduce-the-ing-verbs-in-dialogue-and-action-tags/29287#29287) movitated me to ask this. I don't agree 100% with the answerer, however, I think he has good points. Do you really weaken the focus if you mix dialogue and action too much? Example from my own writing (this is happening in the same scene): > "Does it hurt?" I indicated her eye patch tattoo with one hand, passing her the pen drive with the other. > > Sumire grabbed the device. "Oh, no---only when I blink." > > "How did it happen?" > > "I wanted to take a photo from a high angle, but my phone fell from my selfie stick and hit me in the eye. Silly, huh?" She broke into a quiet giggle. > > I heaved out a sigh. "I thought something more _complex_ had happened to you." > > "Something more complex?" Sumire blinked a few times at me.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-07-19T12:22:30Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 6