Point of view, narrative voice, and when to name a character in narration
Let's say you have a scene with Maria, written in third person from Maria's point of view. Then you have a scene with Akash, written in third person from Akash's point of view - and suppose they do not know each other.
Next, we have a scene with Maria meeting Akash for the first time, written in third person from Maria's point of view. Before Maria finds out Akash's name through dialogue, how should the narrator address Akash in the scene?
For example (1st scenario):
Maria saw a handsome man.
"Hi," the man said. "How are you?"
"I'm good," Maria said.
"Do you know the time?" the man asked.
"It's 3:00PM," Maria said. "What's your name?"
"Akash," the man said.
Then from here on I would address "the man" as just "Akash" in this scene.
OR (2nd scenario):
Maria saw a handsome man.
"Hi," Akash said. "How are you?"
"I'm good," Maria said.
"Do you know the time?" Akash asked.
"It's 3:00PM," Maria said. "What's your name?"
"Akash," Akash said.
My hunch is the first scenario, but I wanted to see what others thought. The reason I ask is because of timing. Let's say the scenarios above are much longer, and Maria doesn't find out the name of Akash until much later in the scene, or she finds out his name in another scene later on.
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Such situations in writing could be resolved once you attribute certain qualities specific for your character.
When Akash is introduced in a scene (before meeting Maria), make sure to detail his appearance and behaviour specific to him. Next, when he meets Maria, she notices these peculiarities in him while still addressing him as 'the man'. So the readers know Maria has met Akash in that particular scene, while she can remain ignorant about his identity in as many scenes you choose. Better yet, introduce him in a particular setting, defining his entire look, and in the next scene he bumps into Maria.
For example, Akash is a handsome young man with specs, keeps his beard trimmed, is not comfortable around strangers, and constantly fidgets with things when nervous. In his introduction scene, he was in his office, dressed in formals, negotiating a deal with his clients. Next, he comes in cafeteria and meets Maria.
Maria saw a handsome man (describe his look briefly). He scratched his beard as he approached her.
"Hi," the man said. "How are you?" He ran his hands on the bridge of his nose.
"I'm good," Maria said.
"Do you know the time?" the man asked nervously looking at his empty wrist.
"It's 3:00PM," Maria said. "What's your name?"
"Akash," the man said.
Remember not to overdo the description or it might reduce the impact of the scene. Just drop subtle hints specific to the character and bring it back when needed.
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You can choose to not use narration. Use dialog and action instead.
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Just because a scene is written from a character's point of view does not mean it is written based only on information available to the character. The first responsibility of the narrative it to make events clear to the reader, so it should generally be written in terms of what is known to the reader.
Think about the difference between exploring a new place for the first time yourself and showing a familiar place to a new person who has not been there before. If you are familiar with the place, you will see your companion noticing features of the place, but they will be places that are known to you, and you will think of they by their usual names. You can certainly imagine, and share sympathetically in, the delight your companion is feeling in seeing the place for the first time, but you can never yourself see it with entirely new eyes again.
So your reader, once you have taken them to a place or introduced them to a person, can never entirely go back and see them with entirely new eyes, even if they are following the POV of a character who has never been there or never met this person. If you introduce Akash as if they were an entirely new person, the reader will not only assume that that Maria has not met this person, but they have not met them either. Then when that person is revealed as Akash, the reader will feel that the writer has intruded to conceal from them the identity of a character they have already met.
We tend to talk about POV as if the so-called limited POV as if it were an iron clad and wholly time-synchronous box from which the narrative could never escape. But trying to maintain that approach leads to all kinds of problems, such as the one you describe.
Life gets a lot easier if you regard all third person narratives as inherently omniscient narrative in which the writer may choose, temporarily and for effect, to follow the POV of one character, with the complete liberty to pull back to the broader view whenever narrative convenience demands it. Indeed, if you are switching POVs in a story, this is implicitly what you are doing anyway. So don't be afraid to linger in the omniscient a while between one POV and another in order to smooth the transition.
And remember that as far as the reader is concerned the entire story is experienced from the reader's POV. The author controls what that POV is at any given moment of the story, but the reader's POV is consistent and continuous from where the reader sits, and you can't, for effect, un-tell them any part of the story that you have told them already.
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