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In a first-person narrative, I’d like to use the following sentence: It took me nearly a decade to write this script, and now I’d pitch it to the top producer in Hollywood. I’m not following ...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T01:21:10Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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Cliff Hangerson Page
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2019-12-08T01:21:10Z (about 5 years ago)
In a first-person narrative, I’d like to use the following sentence: > It took me nearly a decade to write this script, and now I’d pitch it to the top producer in Hollywood. I’m not following strict grammar rules here (for starters, I should use “It had taken me”), but I’m going for a tone that is both informal and immediate. - Assume this sentence appears in a novel written in first person (narrated like a memoir), so the speaker talks about something she expected to do at that specific point in time. How could I improve this sentence with these goals in mind?
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2011-03-12T16:35:13Z (almost 14 years ago)
Original score: 4