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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/30426
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Shakespeare did it, he did it quite a lot of times, but there are a few problems with it:

1. He was a screenwriter in an age, where we couldn't afford building enough sets (or cities that don't catch on fire), so dumping info in dialogue was easier not financially impossible.
2. He's sorta "outdated" (the writing, not his corpse).
3. I have to share the scarce resources of this planet with people who thought that it'd be a good idea to place Romeo and Juliet into a modern era.

However, I'd like to give the story some depth with uninterrupted chit-chats, like [Graham McNeil](https://1d4chan.org/wiki/The_Last_Church).

Example:

> [**Protagonist**]: Ya' know, it's kinda hard to believe that you're doing this for the greater good when your special snowflake sword is literally made out of slaughtered toddlers. But why would you even need it? Order can be maintained with a regular drone army and a few operators.  
> [**A.I sidekick**]: Who are unwitting orphans...  
> [**Protagonist**]: At least I take a good care of them!  
> [**A.I sidekick**]: Sure, they are valuable tools.  
> [**Protagonist**]: That's not even...  
> [**Antagonist**]: You're calling me a mass murderer!? Have you forgotten, when you turned an entire race into unstoppable robots, who only knew and desired nothing else than destruction?  
> [**Protagonist**]: That wasn't intentional, you shittalking corpse!  
> [**Antagonist**]: Not to mention the other mass murderer you made, the Anathema. Your race had the opportunity to prove themselves as the defenders of order, and they instead caused the war that left its mark in the universe for the rest of eternity.  
> [**Protagonist**]: Most of those were Enlil's fault, and he was way too scary looking for everyone else to doubt him. As for Big E., he didn't take his sweet little time going on a treasure hunt, and instead, immediately started to bring back the "order" you adore so much. He ended up as a glorified skeleton, but that was Horus' fault. Admit it, you just want power, you want to take power, like stealing daddy's gun and pretending to be the strong kid while you don't even know how to reload. This is why you've failed.  
> [**Antagonist**]: Don' think it's over yet, let us see how much your words worth against steel!  
> [**Protagonist**]: I'd rather prefer my pen against that.

So, I can't really chop this dialog apart, as it's nothing else than a battle of wits. So, if there's any, what are the things I can do to make this more readable?

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