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Q&A When my story has a powerful phrase but that loses its power when I read it again in the next day, should I keep it or remove it?

Sometimes I have a great idea of sentence (usually for a dialogue) and it is just so nice, beautiful, epic, badass, powerful, or whatever other positive impression. However, sometimes I read it aga...

3 answers  ·  posted 7y ago by Yuuza‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T07:08:22Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/30739
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Yuuza‭ · 2019-12-08T07:08:22Z (almost 5 years ago)
Sometimes I have a great idea of sentence (usually for a dialogue) and it is just so nice, beautiful, epic, badass, powerful, or whatever other positive impression. However, sometimes I read it again in the next day(s) and it is just flat, cringey, contrived, life-less, or any other negative/neutral impression.

So I don't know if I keep it (some kind of _"remember your first laugh"_ for any positive impression) or if I remove it (because the positive impression was actually momentary and I realized it's actually not that good).

So what to do? Does "remember your first laugh" can also kind of be applied to this or should I trust my inner editor's impression about it when I read devoid of any of the emotions of the moment when I wrote it?

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2017-10-10T08:00:15Z (about 7 years ago)
Original score: 25