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Q&A Where to put character responses in dialog?

The convention is to always start a new paragraph when you change the speaker, change the place, or change the time. In this case, you're changing the speaker, so your first example is correct. In ...

posted 7y ago by F1Krazy‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-12T21:42:31Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T07:09:44Z (about 5 years ago)
The convention is to always start a new paragraph when you change the speaker, change the place, or change the time. In this case, you're changing the speaker, so your first example is correct. In the second example it's unclear who's saying the second line - it could be Jack, or it could be Jill or Julia.

**EDIT** : To clarify, if Jack's response is only physical, and he doesn't say anything, you don't need to change paragraphs at all:

> Jane said, "Let's chase the ball." Jack looked at her in disbelief, and she quickly added, "Or we could deflate it."

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2017-10-16T15:33:00Z (about 7 years ago)
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