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Stop trying to save characters typed. You can characterize the tone of the sentence with another entire sentence even longer than the uttered words. Bill closed his eyes for a moment, his lips ...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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System
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2019-12-19T22:13:12Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/31305 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T07:18:32Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/31305 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
Stop trying to save characters typed. You can characterize the tone of the sentence with another entire sentence even longer than the uttered words. > Bill closed his eyes for a moment, his lips tightly compressed. "Boy, was I wrong." > > Bill looked to Cindy, his eyes wide and lips parted in elation, transforming into a wide grin as he realized the full implications of what had just happened. "Boy, was I wrong." Don't try to make punctuation do so much work for you. If you can describe or indicate what the character speaking is feeling, the reader will do the work of imparting the correct matching tone and volume to their spoken words.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-11-07T12:31:32Z (about 7 years ago)
Original score: 0