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this is a slight variation on one aspect of Erk's answer. Place yourself in the situation of your character. You're forced by fear to go cautiously from cover to cover, perhaps moving slowly, care...
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2019-12-18T21:34:21Z (almost 5 years ago)
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2019-12-08T07:32:38Z (almost 5 years ago)
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this is a slight variation on one aspect of [Erk's](https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/32077) answer. Place yourself in the situation of your character. You're forced by fear to go cautiously from cover to cover, perhaps moving slowly, careful not to make any noise. On one hand the tension is immense. On the other hand the repetitive nature of the action is also nerve-breaking. One can easily imagine the growing compulsion to just scream and run, and the struggle with the gripping fear. That. Repeat it. Word by word. Make the reader feel the nerve-breaking tension, and remind them that if the character is not running through, it is because of the paramount fear that looms over them.
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2017-12-19T23:01:21Z (almost 7 years ago)
Original score: 2