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Try describing the physical reactions ... elevated heart rate, sweaty palms, trouble thinking. And maybe the one holding the gun is calmer because he's getting what he wants - or is more nervous b...
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Try describing the physical reactions ... elevated heart rate, sweaty palms, trouble thinking. And maybe the one holding the gun is calmer because he's getting what he wants - or is more nervous because he has trouble with the idea of killing. But if you describe what your characters are feeling physically, you can impart the tension they're feeling emotionally.