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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/32490
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I notice a little negative feedback for your "assumptions" about men and women in your excerpt. I think this is mainly due to common terror of violating the social and political correctness in society today.

Let me just say that I get what you are trying to say and I think that most everyone else does too. That doesn't mean that they agree or that you won't alienate certain readers as other comments mention. You most likely will.

But the question is... Do you care? Is your paper being written to please everyone or to give advice to a very specific group of people?

Instead of replacing the word "women" with "heterosexual women who want to have children" throughout your writing, you could simply specify in the opening of your paper exactly who your audience includes. Or you could do this with a descriptive title (something like "For the woman who wants the "white picket fence"). Once you have defined what kind of woman and/or man you are advising, I think you could safely continue with these opinions, especially if you include any support or evidence of these points from credible sources.

As regarding your original question of "worst" or "one of the worst", I think that is a matter of opinion. There is no definitive answer. If you are writing the paper from YOUR subjective point of view (which it seems like you are, based on your example provided), then "worst" is acceptable if that is what you think. If the paper is from a more objective scientific point of view based on research, you might want to go with "one of the worst".

BTW, I'm an unpublished newbie, so take my advice with a grain of salt. lol

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