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Q&A At what point does a POV character noting their surroundings go from showing/telling to an infodump?

Focus on the character's reactions in that moment, given his intention and state of mind as he enters that environment. Different characters would likely attend to different details, and would rea...

posted 7y ago by Dale Hartley Emery‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T07:41:45Z (about 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Dale Hartley Emery‭ · 2019-12-08T07:41:45Z (about 5 years ago)
Focus on the character's reactions in that moment, given his intention and state of mind as he enters that environment.

Different characters would likely attend to different details, and would react differently to a given detail.

The same character, entering the same space with a different intention or state of mind, would react differently, and to different details.

Focus on what the character reacts to, and on the reaction. Focusing on the reaction helps to make the details not merely information, but also characterization and plot. It's **characterization** because the reaction comes partly from the character's history. It's **plot** because the reaction comes party from the character's intentions in the moment.

If that's still too much, let the strength of the character's reactions guide what to include and what to exclude.

If it's a character the reader hasn't seen, or a place the reader hasn't seen, it's not unusual to have 500 words or more of the character reacting to the surroundings.

Again, if you focus on reaction, you end up with way more than an inventory of what's there.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-01-13T23:46:02Z (almost 7 years ago)
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