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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/32631
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If rewording is indeed what's needed, then @NofP gives a good answer.

However, what I take from your question, and the request from the teacher, is that maybe it's about the way you tell the reader something, without simply telling them "I went there.".

Perhaps the teacher believes that 'the reader' doesn't like when something is stated so simply.

- Maybe that sentence seems superfluous as is? 
- Maybe it needs'something more'?

I do not by principle agree that such a sentence is automatically one of the above, but we can always express something differently.

**So how can we tell the reader that "I went there", in a different way?**

**Add something more**

> "On the way to the restaurant, the rain seemed to slow down the busy streets, leaving some people seemingly calmed by it and others stressed. I was glad I wore the orange raincoat."

**Tell the reader indirectly; 'I went there'**

> "I heard the raindrops on my bedroom window, so I grabbed the orange raincoat, just in case. When I arrived at the restaurant, I found Laura by the first table, wearing what looked like a post-trauma blanket, as if someone had tried to drown her on the way there. Poor thing."

These are, of course, examples made with no knowledge of the story or the characters in your story. They serve to show how you can tell the reader something while focusing on something else, something (perhaps) more relevant or interesting to the reader.

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