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There are many ways to approach this, but here are a few thoughts I had reading your question: Definitely use "football jersey" rather than "football shirt" Describe not just what the clothing is...
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System
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2019-12-08T07:50:10Z (over 4 years ago)
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ArtemisPondering
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2019-12-08T07:50:10Z (over 4 years ago)
There are many ways to approach this, but here are a few thoughts I had reading your question: - Definitely use "football jersey" rather than "football shirt" - Describe not just what the clothing is but _how_ it is - does it fit tightly, or is it loose? Are the colors bright or faded? Does it appear worn-out or dirty, or freshly washed? - Pay attention to how the character is running, and describe it in a way that says something about the eyes through which you're seeing him run. Does he sprint, charge, jog, or pant, etc? - try to avoid using adverbs a lot (like "boldly" - if you have others in surrounding context, this one could probably go). Hope this is helpful!
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System
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2018-02-04T17:00:44Z (about 6 years ago)
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