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Q&A Descriptive words to slow down the pace of the story?

Is it true that to slow down a story, you add descriptive words in place of an action? I feel like the pace my story is going at, I'll finish it in less than 200 pages. It just doesn't feel right ...

2 answers  ·  posted 7y ago by Aspen the Artist and Author‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

Question novel pacing
#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T07:53:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/33130
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar Aspen the Artist and Author‭ · 2019-12-08T07:53:45Z (almost 5 years ago)
Is it true that to slow down a story, you add descriptive words in place of an action?

I feel like the pace my story is going at, I'll finish it in less than 200 pages. It just doesn't feel right to end it so short.

I just made the MC meet the MV and I feel like the last time the villain was mentioned he was fighting an angry pack of wolves, and he was unfamiliar with the surroundings and culture he was in (he's an alien).

So, at this point he had just gotten a group of his men and found a hover scooter for each of them. And they somehow already found the MC.

Like, do I expand on the villain's thoughts and feelings to better slow the story, or do I keep it how it is?

> With nothing to do, Haku took the chore of exterior design, and lifted the sloping roof, repainted, and replaced the decks boards with wood that he cut out of the forest near the house. This happened fairly quickly and only took him a few hours to complete. Haku wiped his forehead on his arm, removing the majority of the sweat that culminated there. His ears picked up a distant noise and he swerved on his heels, making a full 180 turn.
> 
> Motorized humming emanated from the East and several hover scooters rode up to the house. The guy in the front dismounted his scooter and lifted his visor up, his face was completely alien. Haku got a closer look at him as he confidently strode up to where Haku was. His features were all off, they were pointed and sharp, and his eyes were too...discolored. They were a bright turquoise that were filled with life. Haku was skeptical and pressed a button on his watch, notifying KoKo that something was wrong.
> 
> “Cute house,” the man said, almost sarcastically. His voice was soft and angelic. It filled Haku with dread, though, because he knew that wasn’t an ordinary human quality.
> 
> “What are you?” Haku asked, not caring that it was inconsiderate to ask that.
> 
> “I’m really glad you asked that, human.” The man started, he took his helmet completely off now. He had ears that were pointed at the top, not in a ‘birth defect’ sort of way. “I am what you would call an Elf, young one. I am Prince Vincent.” He bowed towards the very confused Haku.
> 
> “I come from my home planet, Morbus, to reactivate our interdimensional contract. It was a lawfully bound promise to keep each other thriving. Your NOVA went back on their word to help us, and now my home is dying,” while the man was speaking, Haku noticed a hint of fangs in the stranger’s mouth, his hair was the same color as his eyes, and his eyes looked reptilian.
> 
> Haku had a memory of his father mentioning NOVA one time, apparently, they control the workforce and careers for able citizens around the world. They were also the lead sponsors for the earliest space explorations. That will explain why there are otherworldlies here.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-02-08T21:34:44Z (almost 7 years ago)
Original score: 4