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Q&A Descriptive words to slow down the pace of the story?

I should think your villain is not well developed, or your hero is not sufficiently motivated. What has the hero been doing all this time, and why does s/he see the villain as a threat? What has th...

posted 6y ago by Amadeus‭  ·  last activity 4y ago by System‭

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#4: Attribution notice removed by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-19T22:13:19Z (over 4 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T07:53:47Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision by (deleted user) · 2019-12-08T07:53:47Z (over 4 years ago)
I should think your villain is not well developed, or your hero is not sufficiently motivated. What has the hero been doing all this time, and why does s/he see the villain as a threat? What has the villain done that s/he knows about and is willing to take the risks of a battle to stop?

When the hero meets the villain for the first time, they are generally not successful in any attempt to thwart them. (In real life maybe, but in fiction it does not make for a good story). The hero must struggle or the victory is empty, like the victory of successfully laundering a load of shirts.

If your natural inclination is they meet quickly, say due to the technology of the alien or something, then you need to have that meeting result in a stalemate, or (non-lethal) defeat for your hero. In fact, in most stories we expect your hero to have a **series** of more defeats and losses than wins, and your villain to have more wins than losses, so the final victory of the hero means something.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-02-08T21:51:21Z (about 6 years ago)
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