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Mark Baker has a great answer if the simultaneous action and dialogue is a one-time thing, which I assume is the case here. But if a character has a persistent tic interwoven with their dialogue, ...
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System
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2019-12-08T07:55:44Z (almost 5 years ago)
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Adrian McCarthy
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2019-12-08T07:55:44Z (almost 5 years ago)
Mark Baker has a great answer if the simultaneous action and dialogue is a one-time thing, which I assume is the case here. But if a character has a persistent tic interwoven with their dialogue, you might need to develop a shortcut so the reader "knows" when the tic happens without explicitly writing about it. I think the _Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid_ screenplay by William Goldman had a good example of this. A tobacco chewing character constantly spits and then shouts "bingo!" or "dammit!" depending on whether he hit his intended target. Soon, the spitting is no longer mentioned explicitly, but there are _bingos_ and _dammits_ sprinkled throughout the dialog. They form a very efficient shorthand for indicating that the character spat again and hit or missed the target.
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System
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2018-02-13T22:32:33Z (almost 7 years ago)
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