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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/a/34432
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If your story focuses on several characters and Alex is not the main character, then yes, this is misleading. Maybe instead you could briefly introduce the main characters of the cast (with 1-2 sentences each) and then tie it all off with a teaser promising political intrigue.

> Alex was mentored by a legendary robot general to become a fearsome warrior. Brian has spent years on the streets of [town], stealing to survive and has become really good at it. Clarice has been trained from birth with the goal to one day assassinate the leader of a cult. Yet when the government is overthrown, none of them is equipped to deal with the real threat.

Okay, that still sounds like the action romp you'd like to avoid, but I'm sure you'll find a better way to tease the political stuff.

Maybe something more along the lines of:

> Together, they can defeat anything. Until, from one day to the next, their world is shaken to the core. Suddenly, it's unclear whom they can trust and they have to scramble to survive amongst political intrigue.

Basically, write something that promises fascinating characters but also hints that the story is about something bigger than them.

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