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I don't think her forgetting is a hint; you could show that easily enough in a conversation. "Anything interesting happen today?" "Not that I can think of. Why?" "I'm going crazy, I swear I...
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2019-12-19T22:13:22Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T08:31:01Z (almost 5 years ago)
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I don't think her **_forgetting_** is a hint; you could show that easily enough in a conversation. > "Anything interesting happen today?" > "Not that I can think of. Why?" > "I'm going crazy, I swear I heard an ice-cream truck today, loud, but I never saw where it was." The reader picks up the hint, or they don't. Another way to show it is to talk about what she IS thinking, she can have thoughts (be looking forward to seeing somebody, or dreading seeing somebody, or taking a test, or wishing she was somewhere else, etc. Have these other thoughts about normal life intrude upon her wonderings about your clue; so the reader sees the transition from WTF is that to "I hate algebra, I'm going to flunk for sure."
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2018-04-11T19:28:09Z (over 6 years ago)
Original score: 3