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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/35474
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Star Wars IV: We never really get to know Aunt Beru and Uncle Owen, and so when they're burned to a crisp, little pieces of human toast, it's horrific but yeah OK. Not as horrific as if we saw Obi Wan go up in flames and reduced to char. No, Obi Wan gets to vanish into the Force Ether.

My latest draft is geared at immersing the reader more deeply into the PoV characters, who are the protagonists. I'm on the penultimate chapter and it used to work as a horrific ending to a villain, but now it doesn't. I'm thinking I need to dial back the details of his demise - because although we don't identify with him, we do more strongly identify with the protagonist than we used to, and she would have a very hard time watching this guy suffer.

**Question:** Is this a recognized thing? **Is a more immersive close-narrative treatment more likely to use subtler plot points and still reach the same emotional effect?** I don't want to dilute the climax (which beta's enjoyed previously) on the other hand it feels too gory now and I think I should. I think in the past versions, the distance required more gore.

I'm not asking for opinions, but rather whether narrative distance relates in any way to the devices used to move the plot along. I suspect an actual answer exists somewhere ...

Original score: 4