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I'm looking for all-around advice on this essay (I'm a foreign student, and learning English), but primarily, I wanted to ask is whether my essay is well-organized and clear enough. I mean, the first question to judge the quality of an essay should be “is everybody understand what the author wanted to say,” right?

And also, I think some of my sentences are verbose and lacking expressiveness.

> ### TOPIC: Whether group learning is the best way to learn for every individual?
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> Real geniuses don't exist. I'm sorry, but those in history said to have the ability to figure out things all by themselves are make-believe. In our journey of discovery, it would not only be helpful to accept assistance from other people, but in some cases, the only path to enlightenment. However, I'm not saying studying with companions is inadvisable. In fact, the time we spend alone practicing and meditating can be equally important.
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> Studying with partners sometimes illuminates us. When studying alone, learners will often encounter the situation where even though they can tell they're puzzled by something, they aren't fully aware of what it is. This is when experienced learners would immediately realize it's time to seek help. If there are something that can only be found in group learning, it would be the communication between humans. Self-study, be it extracting knowledge from books or from other materials, is one-sided information flowing process, meaning that we only accept facts from the material while our feedbacks are not supervised by it. This kind of process is in sharp contrast with human-to-human communication. In which case, with a series of information exchange and mutual observation, the learners would quickly locate the problem.
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> But what makes it an issue, is that studying with other people creates more than communication, they also brings reliance — our reliance on others expecting them to tell us every exact step. In discussions, we spend much more time on expressing and understanding, but much less time on meditating these ideas and digesting them. Our understanding always stays on the linguistic layer and never digs into the core. The finial result often is, well, it seems that we've studied a lot, but we've actually learned little. Even though group learning help us deal with problems we cannot work out all by ourselves, it doesn't negate the fact that the productiveness of the time we spend alone in studying concludes the final result. True mastery of a skill asks for independent thinking. Socrates, Plato and Aristotle had been enthusiastic in discussions and even debates, but that didn't make them less of great independent thinkers.
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> Besides, the proportion of the time we should allocate to study in group is highly dependent on our personality, the subject we are studying and also, our age. People that are good at communication, who feels more comfortable catching information via talking apparently should spend more time in group learning than those who are not so attracted to social activities and prefer reading books quietly. Comparing with philosophy, theoretical physics and pure mathematics, learning languages, sports and special skills may also require more time in group learning . And more energetic younger learners are supposed to spend somewhat more time in group learning than their older counterparts.
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> As a conclusion, group learning has its irreplaceable importance, but we ought to spend proper amount of time in it. I've stated that working in group creates good atmosphere for communication, and communication helps a lot not only in problem solving but also in motivating every member in the group. Meanwhile, I've also pointed that working alone for meditating and review is equally important because group learning won't help you anything in digesting all the information acquired. Finally, I've mentioned the flaw in the speakers statement that no fixed rule is perfect for everybody, the time we should spend in group learning is highly depend on the particular situation of the special individual.

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