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For example, would you say this section of copy has too many "I's" or even "my's"? I woke in a daze. A drug induced daze. I recognized it instantly, the feeling of being disconnected from ...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T09:03:33Z (over 4 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/36797 License name: CC BY-SA 3.0 License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision
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Elise Carver
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2019-12-08T09:03:33Z (over 4 years ago)
For example, would you say this section of copy has too many "I's" or even "my's"? > I woke in a daze. A drug induced daze. > > I recognized it instantly, the feeling of being disconnected from my limbs. Only this was much heavier than the brain fog of the little blue and red pills I usually had in my system. Heavy enough, that the moment I opened my eyes, my body wanted them to close again. The urge to sleep was strong, but the scratchy texture of cheap sheets beneath my skin irritated my senses enough to hold sleep at bay. Slowly blinking, the room came into focus. > > I was all alone.
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2018-06-08T11:16:54Z (almost 6 years ago)
Original score: 6