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In your first example, you allow the reader to experience, together with the character, the waiting for an answer and the wondering why nobody opens the door. Each time your character knocks, there...
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#4: Attribution notice removed
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2019-12-12T21:57:24Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#3: Attribution notice added
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2019-12-08T09:13:40Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
In your first example, you allow the reader to experience, together with the character, the waiting for an answer and the wondering why nobody opens the door. Each time your character knocks, there's waiting, anticipation, build-up of tension. In your second example, you gloss over those experiments. In your first example, you're showing. In the second - you're telling. This would be true in third person as much as in first person, by the way.
#1: Imported from external source
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2018-06-25T18:25:37Z (over 6 years ago)
Original score: 6